On An Excerpt From "The Late American Novel": The Best Books Will Be Written Long After You Are Dead
"Up until her death, the movie’s tone has been exclusively comic, the girl, Clara, a stock banshee bent on emasculating Barney at every quip."
Always watch out for dangling modifiers when emasculating banshees are on the prowl.
"he built rosters as if putting together fantasy basketball team that was three years out of date"
Look out for when you've switch tenses so as not to confusing readers made to lost sensing time.
"But trying to do more than care—to actually risk looking like an idiot (or worse) and take actions that will affect people other than yourself—is an impulse that has to be cultivated and tended to and guarded against all kinds of types of laziness and apathy."
Should read: Meh.
"The mere idea that you could run into a signed Faulkner just wandering around a used bookstore in New Jersey!" is a fragment.
Should read: "The mere idea that you could run into a signed Faulkner just wandering around a used bookstore in New Jersey without coming off as a pretentious douche is ridiculous!"
"Your name struck me as strange at first. And I guess it is a bit strange. But the longer I sit with, the more I think it's strange in a good way, the more I like it."
Should read: "Your name struck me as strange at first. And I guess it is a bit strange. But the longer I sit wasting time on Facebook and YouTube, the more I think I have to get back to blogging about Facebook and YouTube."
"Your life plan for being the best you can be didn't involve a small $100 box that would allow you to watch Netflix Watch Instantly and all sorts of other online streaming television AND media files from a portable hard drive via USB directly on your TV?"
should read "what kind of niche idiot are you that you read the Awl but don't already have a device that that would allow you to watch Netflix Watch Instantly"